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Composition Practice 5

1st essay draft (30 minutes/30 words)

Topic: What are advantages and disadvantages of being constantly surrounded by advertisement? 

Have you ever been annoyed by banner advertisement on the Internet constantly appearing on your computer screen? Some would completely agree. Others would say it is rather convenient to have access to products that look attractive to them. My own view is that one advantage of being surrounded by advertisement is the convenience to have access to the things that we need to buy or might be interested in purchasing while saving time and labor to look for what to buy. At the same time, I think that such convenience can elicit urge or demand to buy unnecessary items, which is one of the disadvantages of having advertisement always close to us.

Advertisement can be convenient when you need to buy the things that you really want. These days, Internet advertisement with direct links prevails everywhere, and we are constantly exposed to information of products. It is rather handy to visit the Web site by one click of a mouse and make purchases within a few minutes. For instance, I always buy nutrition supplements though the Internet because they generally have better deal than physical drug stores in town. When I am busy, and almost forget to buy the supplements that I need, Internet advertisement or recommendation of related links are truly convenient and useful for me to purchase what I need instantly. That being said, there would be an adverse effect of the convenience mentioned above.

Convenience of constant advertisement can be much less beneficial when we handle it improperly. It elicits urge to buy what is in fact unnecessary if you think carefully. The other day, I was browsing my Facebook page and saw the advertisement of some new medicine. Although I had no intention to buy anything then, I was attracted by the product and almost clicked on a purchase button on their Web site. Advertisement is skillfully crafted to invite potential customers to a product, and we are very vulnerable to such attraction. In other words, we are constantly at the risk of sending money unnecessarily. We, therefore, should know how to handle advertisement not to spend our valuable money on unnecessary things. This can be one disadvantage that constant advertisement could have.

To sum up, when we are surrounded advertisement constantly, we will need to face advantages and disadvantages thereof; the convenience to buy necessary items and the risk to spend money on unnecessary items. One way to deal with it is that we are conscious about what we are exposed to and decide our own way to deal with the convenience and the risk of advertisement. (432 words)
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Composition Practice 4

Writing multiple sentences:

There are several things that cats and I have in common; love for independence, short attention span, and affection for towels and soft fabrics. For starters, cats are known to be quite different from dogs. While dogs are a gregarious animal, cats love to act alone and don't usually need a group or pack to live in. Likewise, I'm the person who can spend her time alone as long as it gets. Also, I don't feel comfortable to be in a group or close-knit community. I do miss people, but online communication will basically suffice. Second, it is generally believed that cats are easily distracted because their attention span is short and limited. So is mine. To be more precise, I cannot stay focused on something I'm not very much into such as boring lectures or routine paperwork and house chores Finally, I have a feeling that I love towels and soft fabrics as much as cats do. I was a child who loves sleeping wrapped with her favorite blankets and hates them to be washed. So, I feel some kind of sympathy toward Linus from Peanuts who always holds his favorite security blanket.


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Love for independence, short attention span, and affection for towels and soft fabrics - these are the things that cats and I have in common. For starters, cats are known to be quite different from dogs. While dogs are a gregarious animal, cats love to act alone and don't usually need a group or pack to live in. Some people, likewise, like to act like cats. In fact, I'm a person who can spend her time alone as long as it gets. I don't feel comfortable to be in a group or close-knit community. I, however, do miss people at times. On such occasions, online communication will suffice. As for the attention span, it is generally believed that cats are easily distracted due to their short attention span. This is where I come in. To be more precise, I cannot stay focused on something I'm not very much into, such as boring lectures or routine paperwork and house chores. Regarding the soft fabrics, I have a feeling that I also love these things as much as cats do. I was a child who loved sleeping wrapped with her favorite blankets and hated them to be washed. So, I, therefore, feel some kind of sympathy toward Linus from Peanuts, who always holds his favorite security blanket.

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Composition Practice 3

Consequently
Last summer, the weather was hot and dry in the region. Consequently, we expect the quality of the grapes for wine production to be extremely good.

Indeed
The CEO eventually succeeded in closing the deal with our long-time competitor. Indeed, it was a remarkable achievement.

Thus
Most of the evidence was lost in the plane crash. Thus, it is almost impossible to identify the cause of the accident.

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